Peer Review Blog

The first draft I reviewed was about dogs. I think this is a good essay overall. It has all the required parts. For the literature review part, the author reviewed three articles about dogs intelligence, communication and emotion to prove that dogs are very similar to human beings that we need to treat dogs with respect. They deserve respect from human beings. The problem is that many Chinese people are eating dogs right now, and there is a Yulin dog meat festival  held in some places of China every year. People eat dogs for this festival. I think the author did a good job in using pathos. However, the author could shorten the personal experience part and use more scientific sources since this is a research paper after all. The best advice I provide is to suggest the author to add some pictures of the festival, to help the audience realize how bad the situation is.

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The second draft I reviewed was about cats. This essay is more like a research paper than the first essay. The second essay reviewed three articles about cats and their social behaviors to show that cat’s social behavior is important for their declawing surgery. The author wants to show that cat declawing surgery is a bad idea for cats. The author did a good job overall, however, I think he can limit some of the images in the essay. Not all of the images worked effectively. The best suggestion I gave to this essay is about the introduction. I think the introduction need to revise since it does not work effectively as a guide of the essay.

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The problem-solution draft I reviewed is about elephants. I think it is a good essay in general. Jiatong provided many reasons about the elephant hunting problem. However, he did not provide much information about the historical context of elephant poaching, and I think he need to show the emergence of this problem in his essay. The best advice I provide is about grassroots solution. I think he provided enough global solution, but he did not really discuss about grassroot solutions. Thus, I suggest him to elaborate his grassroot solution part.  

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Peer review is very helpful. I can see how others think about my essay from many different perspectives. We do not necessary need to revise our essay based on peer’s comments, but we can revise our essay based on their attitudes. For example, if I received a comment saying that I missed some information, but I do have that information in my essay, then it means that I did not write that part clearly. I believe this is the best thing I can learn from peer’s comments. Also, I can realize my problem by reading others essays. I always change my essay because I find something from my peers that I really like, and I will change my essay to include similar parts, such as adding subtitles to make my essay more clear.